Pre writing- The introduction is going to give the readers a background on what the paper is about. It is going to help me since the groundwork is laid the paper will be easier to read. This paper is intended to give a study of golf, the psychological aspect when reacting to certain conditions and golf in business.The target audience for this paper is anyone that likes to golf. It is also a good read to anyone else since it deals with reading peoples character on and off the course.
Intro: Golf is a game that requires extreme patience and concentration. When playing a game of golf some players maintain their composure and forget bad shots and circumstances, others become very angry and let it get to them. The question being asked is “How is golf a way to reveal personality?” There are many components to this question, such as how golf effects business, the stress-ors of the the game and much more.
The term personality in this paper refers to how a person acts in any situation, it could also be known as a persons character. This is interesting due to the fact that golf has many forms of stress associated with it, if coped with well the golfer can reduce scores. “When events are appraised as challenging, threatening, harmful, or even beneficial, coping responses are required.” AR. Nicholls and RC. Polman stated, they went on to say, “In order to manage stress, athletes must deploy coping strategies” (284).
The human mind is a powerful tool, in the sense of putting what is in the mind into reality. When asked to imagine writing, individuals had an increase in Regional cerebral blood flow,when monitoring brain activity, both imagining and doing an action both resulted in similar activity (Beilock and Gonzo 921). This shows that imagining a shot or dreading on a previous shot is similar to actually performing the action. Since the game is so mental it needs to discussed and researched on how it can reveal the golfers personality, on and off of the golf course.
Post Writing: It seems as if the tone for the paper has been set. Some information from various sources was included and some personality was put into the writing. This intro should leave plenty or room to set up the rest of the paper. Its not the best intro right now its just a shitty first draft, with some revisions it can be a good paper.
Works Cited
Nicholls, AR and Polman, RC. “Think Aloud: acute stress and coping strategies during golf performances.” Anxiety, Stress & Coping vol 21 (2008): pp. 283-294
Beilock, SL, Gonso, S. “Putting in the mind versus on the green: expertise, performance time, and the linking of imagery and action.” Quarterly Journal of Experimental Psychology vol. 61 (2008) pp. 920-932
Great topic dude, and hell of an intro! i would definitely read more! I think its interesting that your looking the mental aspect!